Young gun

Really powerful. The stereotypical emotion was put across a little differently here with great construction of sentences and concepts.And I guess something about the rat race also was put across ...

I understood what this was about but its really too short. Stuff like the Narrator saying "I want to be me" needs to be put across differently and with more ...

That was quite a nice one.Real life stuff put very well. The general story was nice and i really liked the way you ended it. Keep practising.

Thanks for the reviews people.I'll try to improve this if I can.

It was some Agatha Christie book.I just read a few pages and stopped at that.Boring beginning.

Thanks for the review octo. I'll see if I can expand the main character's idea without making this a story.

I totally understood what you meant.The feeling of excitement of your addiction lasts only as long as its happening.Once its over,all the fun is gone. A very simple, easy, comprehensible ...

Good does not always win................I quite forgot about that.I'll see what is possible.But maybe, good looses because people with all heart and no brain fight for it. Really appreciate the ...

Thanks for the reviews people.About the rhyme...........I am still trying to make it sound not forced, something a little hard for me right now.

You really want you're readers to think! This was some unconventional and unique work.The different possibilities you gave make us think about water in so many different ways. You seem ...

This is how a story should be told.....keeping the reader's interest all the time. Great work.Hope to see some something as good or better than this sometime later.

This might help a little: Free style writing is good,but many parts of your poem sounded like you were writing prose. You are not establishing links good enough from one ...

Thanks.This was just the kind of case I expected to see. By the way....I am shortsighted too.Got them when I was 15.

This was an extremely unconventional and amazing poem.This poem really makes you think deeply about the underlying message present in it. From when were seeds until when we are sprung ...

A totally amazing improvement.I must say you're learning really fast and improving even faster.Greater clarity this time and much simper choice of sentences. Keep such great work coming.